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Choking Forest by ~Macowl:iconMacowl:



Seeking solace in the forest expanse
Amongst the twisted trees and plants
Gnarled branches grope the murky air
Wisened grey owls do naught but stare
Moonlight dapples through the deadened leaves
Casting shadows upon the creatures and thieves
That sneak their way on this frosted night
And dance on moss laiden with starlight

But alone he stands jealously spying
Yearning to dance and secretly crying
Avoiding more pain he leaves the scene
This silver joy must not be seen
Upwards, above, an endless sky
That beautiful darkness you cannot buy
It stretches out like a black abyss
Much like the forest, consumed by mist

A wind picks up and forms a howl
Searing through the woods so foul
It rushes disturbing the leaves of gold
And brings terrible misfortune untold
The sole spider crawls out warily
Feeling the chill, it wanders scarily
Legs click and check its familiar home
Like an orchestra they feel as one

Pressing onwards my neck-hair bristles
As my feet pass along the lilac thistles
A dewdrop falls upon the coarse grey ground
I look up ahead, and hear a sound
A lump in my throat and my heart begins
To beat harder and faster and it chokes me within
This gale is relentless and sweeps from behind
I glance between my fingers, and am repulsed at what i find...
©2008-2009 ~Macowl
:iconmacowl:

Author's Comments

Longest poem to write so far
Few days
I couldnt decide where i wanted it to go
I might add more
But im happy with it as it is

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:iconbeyondweird:
"And brings terrible misfortune untold" This line sounds quite awkward.

Otherwise, it's really good, LOVE the images, I can absolutely picture it.

That last line has me curious though =P

:heart: it x

--
We demand rigidly defined areas of doubt and uncertainty! - Hitchhikers Guide To The Galaxy
:iconmacowl:
hahahah
well thank you very much
i used up a lorra brain power on this
which i think faltered a lot in the 2nd stanza

i too thought it sounded awkward
but its good enough for now me thinks
i let ya know if it changes


and THANKS FOR FAVING ITTT


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- Michael -

"If you are so set on running...Hadn't you best be off?"
:iconruby-raquelle:
I like this poem lots and lots =)
It definitely has a lot of meaning to it =P
Brilliant

--
'The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.' ~ Eleanor Roosevelt

'Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you'll land among the stars.' ~ Les Brown
:iconmacowl:
tar very much rach
glad you like it
=]

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- Michael -

"If you are so set on running...Hadn't you best be off?"
:iconlittlemissdanni22:
yearning to dance but secretly crying <3 love that line, really like this piece :)

very well done

your best yet i think

x
:iconmacowl:
well thank you very much
*grins* with my proper huge cartoony grin too

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- Michael -

"If you are so set on running...Hadn't you best be off?"
:iconpsychotic-tacman:
Ooh, gotta say this is full on welll nifty mate.
Seriously i love it, tis dark and magical and just generally wonderful and i'm afraid tahts about as deep a comment as i'm going to give.

Tis fantastically ace.

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Cheers, Martyn.
:iconmacowl:
hahahaha
dont need deepness
just your soul
=]

..................................seriously

nah
haha
thanks v much friend
for the fav as well
=]

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- Michael -

"If you are so set on running...Hadn't you best be off?"

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